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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the issues involved. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the issues involved. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. 3W3gJ
Day by day almost world’s every country has encountered an obstacle to reach the perfect and balanced health care system and the world without any health issues. In order to overcome this world wide issue some people think that the young generations must have a wide rage of knowledge about physical education and learn them in their school curriculum. After giving it a thought and analysed it deeply from the benificial and harmful perspectives, I disagree with the following statement. To see that how learning and practicing more physical education in school from the beneficial side, is that children will learn how to be active and obtain a healthy lifestyle. For instance, my cousin who live in austria has learned the good side of the being taught about healthy lifestyle and care systems that she became vegetarian and exercise three times a day. The next reason is that if poor or developing countries's school main curriculum has or improve the physical education, It will benefit the future of the country with intellectual people. However to see the contradicting point of view, in order to reduce the overweight people in a certain country, It is undeniable that the government should take actions on the target which is overweight. If the government made an informative serial documentaries which could include not only students but all the rest of the age in the country. From my country’s experience, which is Mongolia, last summer our main television channel broadcasted a health series documentary about how to maintain the healthy lifestyle. I could see a spectacular result from this which it reached over thousands of citizens and contacting various districts of hospitals. To sum up, every problem has a solution. Yet in order to reach the desired destination, one or a country should must contemplate the best solution and decision. From my perspective, I believe that school curriculum should not only include the topic.
Day by day almost world’s every
country
has encountered an obstacle to reach the perfect and balanced health care system and the world without any health issues. In order to overcome this
world wide
issue
some
people
think
that the young generations
must
have a wide rage of knowledge about physical education and learn them in their
school
curriculum. After
giving it
a
thought
and
analysed
it
deeply
from the
benificial
and harmful perspectives, I disagree with the following statement. To
see
that how learning and practicing more physical education in
school
from the beneficial side, is that children will learn how to be active and obtain a healthy lifestyle.
For instance
, my cousin who
live
in
austria
has learned the
good
side of the
being taught
about healthy lifestyle and care systems that she became vegetarian and exercise three times a day. The
next
reason is that if poor or developing
countries's
school
main curriculum has or
improve
the physical education, It will benefit the future of the
country
with intellectual
people
.
However
to
see
the contradicting point of view, in order to
reduce
the overweight
people
in a certain
country
, It is undeniable that the
government
should take actions on the target which is overweight. If the
government
made an informative serial
documentaries
which could include not
only
students
but
all the rest of the age in the
country
. From my
country’s
experience, which is Mongolia, last summer our main television channel broadcasted a health series documentary about how to maintain the healthy lifestyle. I could
see
a spectacular result from this which it reached over thousands of citizens and contacting various districts of hospitals. To sum up, every problem has a solution.
Yet
in order to reach the desired destination, one or a
country
should
must
contemplate the best solution and decision. From my perspective, I believe that
school
curriculum should not
only
include the topic.
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IELTS academic The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the issues involved. Some people think that the best way to solve this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum.

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