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Some people think that women should be able to join the army, navy or air forces like what men do. Others think that only men should do that. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that women should be able to join the army, navy or air forces like what men do. Others think that only men should do that. Y1w8n
Nowadays, the question of whether women should join the military or not has sparked a controversy. While I agree that women cannot contribute directly, I believe that there are many reasons proving that they have enough capacity to join the army. On the one hand, I believe that joining the military is not applicable for women because of their weak physical health. In the army, physical health is the most important factor which decides the victory and strength of the countries, so that men are more suitable. Moreover, instead of joining directly, patriotism can be expressed by doing things in other ways. For example, they contribute to the national economy or back-office jobs. On the other hand, patriotism is the most important characteristic that makes people take part in the army, no matter what gender they are. This is proved by formidable triumphs (chiến công oanh liệt) of heroines. For example, in Vietnam, Trung sisters are heroines of the first Vietnamese independence movement, who headed a rebellion against the Chinese Han-dynasty overlords and briefly established an autonomous state. At the same time, people is thought that joining the military must be soldiers or combatant. However, in fact there are a variety of jobs that need to be done in the military, for example, cook or nurse. Cho nên không có lý do gì mà phụ nữ không thể tham gia vào qdodoi. There is no reason why women cannot join the military. In other words, nowadays, although many people believe that women do not have enough physical health to contribute to the army, thanks to technological innovation, modern battlefields require more technical skills as well as less physical strength, for example an unpiloted aircraft. That is highlight point for the participant of women in that battlefield. In conclusion, although the views of women should not contribute directly to the battlefield, we should consider the ability of this idea.
Nowadays,
the question of whether
women
should
join
the military or not has sparked a controversy. While I
agree
that
women
cannot
contribute
directly
, I believe that there are
many
reasons proving that they have
enough
capacity to
join
the army. On the one hand, I believe that joining the military is not applicable for
women
because
of their weak
physical
health. In the army,
physical
health is the most
important
factor which decides the victory and strength of the countries,
so
that
men
are more suitable.
Moreover
,
instead
of joining
directly
, patriotism can
be expressed
by doing things in other ways. For
example
, they
contribute
to the national economy or back-office jobs.
On the other hand
, patriotism is the most
important
characteristic that
makes
people
take part
in the army, no matter what gender they are. This
is proved
by formidable triumphs (
chiến
công
oanh
liệt
) of heroines. For
example
, in Vietnam,
Trung
sisters are heroines of the
first
Vietnamese independence movement, who headed a rebellion against the Chinese Han-dynasty overlords and
briefly
established an autonomous state. At the same time,
people
is
thought
that joining the military
must
be soldiers or combatant.
However
, in fact there are a variety of jobs that need to
be done
in the military, for
example
, cook or nurse.
Cho
nên
không
do
phụ
nữ
không
thể
tham
gia
vào
qdodoi
. There is no reason why
women
cannot
join
the military.
In other words
, nowadays, although
many
people
believe that
women
do not have
enough
physical
health to
contribute
to the army, thanks to technological innovation, modern battlefields require more technical
skills
as well
as less
physical
strength, for
example
an
unpiloted
aircraft.
That is
highlight point for the participant of
women
in that battlefield.
In conclusion
, although the views of
women
should not
contribute
directly
to the battlefield, we should consider the ability of this
idea
.
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