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life of one person and his diary.

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As a child, Jee Seok-Jin loved speaking in front of people. That's why he already ran school events as a host in high school and dreamed of becoming an MC. However, when he was a high school student in Korea in the 1980s, there was no system comparable to the “MC Open Recruitment Test” and famous MCs were well-known singers or comedians. That's why he concluded if he want to be an MC, he had to become a singer first. Later he formed a band called "Purple Haze" with his high school friends at this time to make music first. Even after he entered the university, he formed a new band to continue his musical activities and also worked as an actor in the theater, an musical actor. However, despite his diverse activities, he did not achieve what he wanted, and finally began a military career in the "Navy Entertainment Group". And in the Navy, he also met his lifelong friend, Kim Yong-man. Since the two were called up at the same time and served 3 years of military service together, a close friendship developed between them. Because Jee Seok-Jin's goal was to become an MC and Kim Yong-man wanted to be a comedian, the two promised each other that they would be successful in the entertainment industry together. So they fostered their hosting skills as MCs by holding around 30-40 military events per year in this 3 years. As Jee Seok-Jin's 3 years of military service came to an end, the performances as MCs, who were still singers at this time, were outstanding. Therefore, he decided to become a singer again and started making his own albums in the army. After his discharge from the military, he visited numerous agencies with his demo tapes. Although no one paid any attention to his work, he did not give up. And finally, one day a record company contacted him. The representative of this record company said, "Your voice is so good that this album would sell 1 million times. " So, Jee Seok-Jin made his official debut as a singer in 1992 with his first album, "Smile on a gloomy afternoon". But the result was disastrous. After hearing that 1 million albums would be sold, he pre-printed 30, 000 albums, but of those only 2, 400 were sold nationwide. At some point the cost of disposing those unwanted albums would have cost more than the production, so he took these CDs home with him. And at this time, his friend had already successfully made his comedian debut and was very active. In light of this, Jee Seok-Jin congratulated his friend but was very disappointed over his own failure. However, at this time he met many comedians through Kim Yong-Man, which soon developed close friendships, and one of them was the rookie comedian Yoo Jae-Suk A year before Jee Seok-Jin's debut as a singer, a new broadcasting station called SBS was launched in Korea. And SBS gave rookie comedians the opportunity to host a wide variety of programs, so it definitely had a huge impact on the comedians around Jee Seok-Jin. And with those opportunities, they got famous. However, Jee Seok-Jin, who was still a singer at this time, couldn't enjoy these benefits at all. After the failure of his first album, he stopped all activities and had a long struggle, so Kim Yong-man recommended him to take a comedian test. So, he started to write the script and practiced it on the stage with the help of his comedian friends. Fortunately, he passed the "KBS Comedian Open Recruitment Test" and officially worked as a comedian from then on. After he officially started his comedian career, he soon formed deeper friendships with other comedians, including Yoo Jae-Seok. But his comedian life wasn't exactly that smooth either. That was because all of his friends were “7th KBS Comedian", as they debuted 3 years earlier than him, and Jee Seok-Jin was alone a “10th KBS Comedian". In the Korean 90s, unlike today, there was a strict hierarchy between seniors and juniors in the comedian world. That was why his close relationships with senior comedians were not welcomed, and many comedians saw him in a bad light. In addition, some senior comedians saw his unique speech and behavior as rude, which earned him a lot of disapproval from these seniors, and that made his comedian life very difficult. Besides, he had neither talent nor interest as a comedian, he again spent a long time without any special achievements.
As a child,
Jee
Seok-Jin
loved
speaking in front of
people
. That's why he already ran
school
events
as a host in high
school
and dreamed of becoming an MC.
However
, when he was a high
school
student in Korea in the 1980s, there was no system comparable to the
“MC
Open Recruitment
Test
” and
famous
MCs
were well-known
singers
or comedians. That's why he concluded if he
want
to be an MC, he had to become a
singer
first
. Later he formed a band called
"
Purple Haze
"
with his high
school
friends
at this
time
to
make
music
first
. Even after he entered the university, he formed a new band to continue his musical activities and
also
worked as an actor in the theater,
an
musical actor.
However
, despite his diverse activities, he did not achieve what he wanted, and
finally
began a military career in the
"
Navy Entertainment Group
"
. And in the Navy, he
also
met his lifelong
friend
, Kim Yong-
man
. Since the two
were called
up at the same
time
and served 3 years of military service together, a close friendship developed between them.
Because
Jee
Seok-Jin
's goal was to become an MC and Kim Yong-
man
wanted to be a
comedian
, the two promised each other that they would be successful in the entertainment industry together.
So
they fostered their hosting
skills
as
MCs
by holding around 30-40 military
events
per
year
in this 3 years. As
Jee
Seok-Jin
's 3 years of military service came to an
end
, the performances as
MCs
, who were
still
singers
at this
time
, were outstanding.
Therefore
, he decided to become a
singer
again and
started
making his
own
albums
in the army. After his discharge from the military, he visited numerous agencies with his demo tapes. Although no one paid any attention to his work, he did not give up. And
finally
, one day a record
company
contacted him. The representative of this record
company
said,
"
Your voice is
so
good
that this
album
would sell 1 million
times
.
"
So
,
Jee
Seok-Jin
made his official debut as a
singer
in 1992 with his
first
album
,
"
Smile on a gloomy afternoon
"
.
But
the result was disastrous. After hearing that 1 million
albums
would
be sold
, he
pre-printed
30, 000
albums
,
but
of those
only
2, 400
were sold
nationwide. At
some
point the cost of disposing those unwanted
albums
would have cost more than the production,
so
he took these CDs home with him. And at this
time
, his
friend
had already
successfully
made his
comedian
debut and was
very
active. In light of this,
Jee
Seok-Jin
congratulated his
friend
but
was
very
disappointed over his
own
failure.
However
, at this
time
he met
many
comedians
through Kim Yong-
Man
, which
soon
developed close friendships, and one of them was the rookie
comedian
Yoo
Jae-Suk
A
year
before
Jee
Seok-Jin
's debut as a
singer
, a new broadcasting station called SBS
was launched
in Korea. And SBS gave rookie
comedians
the opportunity to host a wide variety of programs,
so
it definitely had a huge impact on the
comedians
around
Jee
Seok-Jin
. And with those opportunities, they
got
famous
.
However
,
Jee
Seok-Jin
, who was
still
a
singer
at this
time
, couldn't enjoy these benefits at all. After the failure of his
first
album
, he
stopped
all activities and had a long struggle,
so
Kim Yong-
man
recommended him to take a
comedian
test
.
So
, he
started
to write the script and practiced it on the stage with the
help
of his
comedian
friends.
Fortunately
, he passed the
"
KBS
Comedian
Open Recruitment
Test
"
and
officially
worked as a
comedian
from then on. After he
officially
started
his
comedian
career, he
soon
formed deeper friendships with other
comedians
, including
Yoo
Jae-Seok
.
But
his
comedian
life wasn't exactly that smooth either. That was
because
all of his
friends
were “7th KBS Comedian
"
, as they debuted 3 years earlier than him, and
Jee
Seok-Jin
was alone a “10th KBS Comedian
"
. In the Korean 90s, unlike
today
, there was a strict hierarchy between
seniors
and juniors in the
comedian
world. That was why his close relationships with
senior
comedians
were not welcomed, and
many
comedians
saw
him in a
bad
light.
In addition
,
some
senior
comedians
saw
his unique speech and behavior as rude, which earned him
a lot of
disapproval from these
seniors
, and that made his
comedian
life
very
difficult.
Besides
, he had neither talent nor interest as a
comedian
, he again spent a long
time
without any special achievements.
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