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When tragedies such as Covid-19 and military coup strike, our country is in dire need of fast-paced development. When social workers unite for the betterment of the country in assisting the poor and under developing communities, the future of the country is reassured. My educational and career goal is to one day to be able to help people with my skills and knowledge as a personally fulfilling profession. Thailand; a neighboring country of Myanmar, recently saw rise in technology and education systems thanks to the booming economy. Moreover, universities and education facilities in Thailand are at a respectable place in global context. Chiang Mai University is ranked the third best in Thailand, and placed 793 in South East Asia as of 2019, which makes me eager to study there as it can promise great education for me to re-contribute to my country. In university, I had gone on a study trip with my teachers and peers to Ngapali beach. There I discovered a shocking reality of how natives are being exploited by the foreign cutthroat companies. As I was walking along the beach with my friends, we witnessed an injustice sight. A native child was selling roasted seafood on the beach. Suddenly a security guard from a certain hotel came out and cursed at the child, forcing him to leave the place. The child was not even on the hotel’s property. He was only walking on the beach. Both the child and I felt helpless as he walked away in despair but the anger in me still burned after we returned to the local village house where we were staying. Since the incident, I have been dwelling on the reasons why our native people are treated poorly by others. The lack of proper education in locals from underdeveloped areas leading to businesses bullying the native people and the absence of education outreach in rural communities are the reasons that possibly trigger these situations. The development of the native people is a long and hard process, but is something attainable should we work together. Currently exists numbers of nonprofit organizations such as Save the Children, UNOCHA, UNFPA in Myanmar which are standing for what I believe in. After I have studied enthusiastically in Thailand, I will return to Myanmar to work on my goal of improving native people’s lives. I will join a nonprofit organization which shares the same belief as mine. I will go to rural and hard-to-reach underdeveloped parts of Myanmar and fulfill both educational and personal needs of local people. As I have graduated from Thailand I will bring in knowledge and ideas from the foreign country and share them with my people, bridging the communities of both countries closer. I will persuade my friends and family to join for my cause, and as together, we will contribute to our country as it paces towards the better days where people from different races and ethnicities receive equal education systems and human rights.
When tragedies such as Covid-19 and military coup strike, our
country
is in dire need of
fast
-paced development. When social workers unite for the betterment of the
country
in assisting the poor and under developing communities, the future of the
country
is reassured
. My educational and career goal is to one day to be able to
help
people
with my
skills
and knowledge as a
personally
fulfilling profession. Thailand; a neighboring
country
of Myanmar, recently
saw
rise in technology and
education
systems thanks to the booming economy.
Moreover
, universities and
education
facilities in Thailand are at a respectable place in global context. Chiang Mai University
is ranked
the third best in Thailand, and placed 793 in South East Asia as of 2019, which
makes
me eager to study there as it can promise great
education
for me to re-contribute to my country. In university, I had gone on a study trip with my teachers and peers to
Ngapali
beach
. There I discovered a shocking reality of how
natives
are
being exploited
by the foreign cutthroat
companies
. As I was walking along the
beach
with my friends, we witnessed an injustice sight. A
native
child
was selling roasted seafood on the
beach
.
Suddenly
a security
guard from
a certain hotel came out and cursed at the
child
, forcing him to
leave
the place. The
child
was not even on the hotel’s property. He was
only
walking on the
beach
. Both the
child
and I felt helpless as he walked away in despair
but
the anger in me
still
burned after we returned to the local village
house
where we were staying. Since the incident, I have been dwelling on the reasons why our
native
people
are treated
poorly
by others. The lack of proper
education
in locals from underdeveloped areas leading to businesses bullying the
native
people
and the absence of
education
outreach in rural communities are the reasons that
possibly
trigger these situations. The development of the
native
people
is a long and
hard
process,
but
is something attainable should we work together.
Currently
exists numbers of nonprofit organizations such as Save the Children,
UNOCHA
,
UNFPA
in Myanmar which are standing for what I believe in. After I have studied
enthusiastically
in Thailand, I will return to Myanmar to work on my goal of improving
native
people’s
lives
. I will
join
a nonprofit organization which shares the same belief as mine. I will go to rural and
hard
-to-reach underdeveloped parts of Myanmar and fulfill both educational and personal needs of local
people
. As I have graduated from Thailand I will bring in knowledge and
ideas
from the foreign
country
and share them with my
people
, bridging the communities of both
countries
closer. I will persuade my friends and family to
join
for my cause, and as together, we will contribute to our
country
as it paces towards the better
days where
people
from
different
races and ethnicities receive equal
education
systems and human rights.
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