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Dear Department of Children and Youth My name is Hathairat Pinitsuwan, and I am a Work and Holiday Visa applicant. I wrote this travel plan to address my objective in going to Australia. I graduated from Srinakharinwirot University, Thailand. I have been doing an engineering position in Thailand for almost 5 years. I plan to travel around the world, which is my dream. I heard about the program two years ago from my friend who was living in Australia with a Work and Holiday Visa. I am interested in joining the Work and Holiday program in 2022 due to the fact it is an extremely inclusive program, and I can travel around Australia for a year. While my Visa is still active, I can have the possibility to work to cover my expenses. Finally, I can have growing experience of travelling and working. On my rough schedule, I expect to get a visa around Nov 2022 and then I will go to Sydney around July 2023. I have decided to stay in Sydney for 1 year as my friend also lives there with a student visa. In my first 3 months, I plan to take a language class like the General English or the English for Business course. After class, I plan to find a part-time job such as delivering food using a bicycle as this position is supremely flexible, so I can manage my work schedule by myself or work at some cafés and restaurants in a waitress position as I had experience while I went to the United States with a Work and Travel Visa 5 years ago. If I gain some pocket money from my part-time job, I will spend it on travelling around Sydney or other cities. In New South Wales, I plan to visit the Sydney Opera House, which is in Sydney Harbour, also Harbour Bridge and Bondi Beach. The Sydney Opera’s unique use of a series of gleaming white sail-shaped shells as the roof structure makes it one of the most-photographed buildings in the world. Bondi Beach is one of Australia’s most well-known beaches because of its laid-back coastal style and café culture and it is 30 minutes away from Town Hall Station. After that, when I finish my language class, I think my language skills which I gained from English class and my experience which I had from a part-time job will be greatly improved. I will seek a full-time job in a technology role in the future because I graduated from the engineering and technology field. In 6 months before returning to Thailand, I plan to travel to Victoria and Queensland, visit The Great Ocean Road and Twelve Apostles, Philip Island, and Brighton Beach in Victoria. The Great Ocean Road and Twelve Apostles is one of Victoria’s most iconic natural attractions and popular for visitors at sunrise and sunset. Admire the Twelve Apostles, limestone stacks located off the shore of Port Campbell National Park. Philip Island is home to the Little Penguins and idyllic beaches and the island is well-known for its Little Penguin parade. In Queensland, I plan to visit Lone Pine Koala Sanctuary, Streets Beach, and Wheel of Brisbane. Lone Pine Koala Sanctuary is the world’s first and largest koala sanctuary, home to over 100 koalas and 70 species of other Australian native animals. The sanctuary offers guests the opportunity to get up close and personal with the wildlife in a natural environment. Examples are koala holds and kangaroo feeding. Finally, I will fly back to Thailand around June 2024. This is my rough plan while I am staying in Australia. The main reason is to travel to Australia and explore the incredible cities and study to understand their own culture. I believe that the Work and Holiday program would improve my language skills, since language acquisition is achieved through practical immersion. There is no better place to improve my competence than travelling to countries where people chat in their native language. Also, I can have the opportunity to pick up another language, not only English. I can make numerous friends from around the world and have numerous different backgrounds. They will allow me to explore different cultures and thus enhance my understanding of the world. I will be gaining skills which allow me to grow more independent and adjustable. These will be extremely useful later in life in both further education and my career. I will make observations of all the conditions of my visa and will return to Thailand with allow time. I wish I had given helpful information for your consideration.
Dear Department of Children and Youth My name is Hathairat Pinitsuwan, and I am a
Work
and
Holiday
Visa applicant. I wrote this
travel
plan
to address my objective in going to Australia. I graduated from Srinakharinwirot University, Thailand. I have been doing an engineering position in Thailand for almost 5 years. I
plan
to
travel
around
the
world
, which is my dream. I heard about the
program
two years ago from my friend who was living in Australia with a
Work
and
Holiday
Visa. I
am interested
in joining the
Work
and
Holiday
program
in 2022 due to the fact it is an
extremely
inclusive
program
, and I can
travel
around
Australia for a
year
. While my Visa is
still
active, I can have the possibility to
work
to cover my expenses.
Finally
, I can have growing experience of travelling and working. On my rough schedule, I
expect
to
get
a visa
around
Nov 2022 and then I will go to Sydney
around
July 2023. I have decided to stay in Sydney for 1
year
as my friend
also
lives
there with a student visa. In my
first
3 months, I
plan
to take a
language
class
like the General English or the English for Business course. After
class
, I
plan
to find a part-time
job
such as delivering food using a bicycle as this position is
supremely
flexible,
so
I can manage my
work
schedule by myself or
work
at
some
cafés and restaurants in a waitress position as I had experience while I went to the United States with a
Work
and
Travel
Visa 5 years ago. If I gain
some
pocket money from my part-time
job
, I will spend it on travelling
around
Sydney or other cities. In New South Wales, I
plan
to visit the Sydney Opera
House
, which is in Sydney Harbour,
also
Harbour Bridge and Bondi
Beach
. The Sydney Opera’s unique
use
of a series of gleaming white sail-shaped shells as the roof structure
makes
it one of the most-photographed buildings in the
world
. Bondi
Beach
is one of Australia’s most well-known
beaches
because
of its laid-back coastal style and café culture and it is 30 minutes away from Town Hall Station. After that, when I finish my
language
class
, I
think
my
language
skills
which I gained from English
class
and my experience which I had from a part-time
job
will be
greatly
improved
. I will seek a full-time
job
in a technology role in the future
because
I graduated from the engineering and technology field. In 6 months
before
returning to Thailand, I
plan
to
travel
to Victoria and Queensland, visit The Great Ocean Road and Twelve Apostles, Philip Island, and Brighton
Beach
in Victoria. The Great Ocean Road and Twelve Apostles is one of Victoria’s most iconic natural attractions and popular for visitors at sunrise and sunset. Admire the Twelve Apostles, limestone stacks located off the shore of Port Campbell National Park. Philip Island is home to the
Little
Penguins and idyllic
beaches
and the island is well-known for its
Little
Penguin parade. In Queensland, I
plan
to visit Lone Pine Koala
Sanctuary
, Streets
Beach
, and Wheel of Brisbane. Lone Pine Koala
Sanctuary
is the
world’s
first
and largest koala
sanctuary
, home to over 100 koalas and 70 species of other Australian native animals. The
sanctuary
offers guests the opportunity to
get
up close and personal with the wildlife in a natural environment. Examples are koala holds and kangaroo feeding.
Finally
, I will
fly
back to Thailand
around
June 2024. This is my rough
plan
while I am staying in Australia. The main reason is to
travel
to Australia and explore the incredible cities and study to understand their
own
culture. I believe that the
Work
and
Holiday
program
would
improve
my
language
skills
, since
language
acquisition
is achieved
through practical immersion. There is no better place to
improve
my competence than travelling to countries where
people
chat in their native
language
.
Also
, I can have the opportunity to pick up another
language
, not
only
English. I can
make
numerous friends from
around
the
world
and have numerous
different
backgrounds. They will
allow
me to explore
different
cultures and
thus
enhance my understanding of the
world
. I will be gaining
skills
which
allow
me to grow more independent and adjustable. These will be
extremely
useful later in life in both
further
education and my career. I will
make
observations of all the conditions of my visa and will return to Thailand with
allow
time. I wish I had
given
helpful information for your consideration.
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