Legend: Mistakes Corrections 7 Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more 3 Can be paraphrased Just=merely But= on the contrary Different= various Comments: Always check the tenses of the verbs by also checking if the dates and time of chart. Avoid using fragment sentence. Be mindful with subject-verb agreement. Task Achievement (TA): 6.0 Coherence and Cohesion (CC): 5.0 Lexical Resource (LR): 5.5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): 6.0 Advice Your supposed score is 5.5 You address the requirements of the task , but the information presented needs more clear organization. You also attempt using complex sentences, but they are often inaccurate. You use a mix of complex and simple grammatical forms , but there are mistakes grammatically that might impede communication.

The diagram illustrates the life cycle of the honey bee in six stages. Beginning with the eggs attached to the leaf and culminating became the mature honey bees. First of all, a leaf is attached by the honey bee eggs and they are waited to hatch. After 9 to 10 days, the eggs are hatched and the larva is left the eggs. Furthermore, the larvae are processed to grow for about 21 days until young adult bees are emerged. During this time, the larva is grown up day by day. Also, new moults are needed to change three times by nymphs as it grows because it is getting bigger. Next, the young adult bees have become mature bee need to be four days. When the bees have been matured and enter the mating season, the bees will find the opposite sex and breed the next generation. Finally, each female bee can been lay 1 or 2 eggs every three days, and it will start the bee life cycle again.