Visiting places in hard conditions
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Hello. .
How are you doing?
My name is Afnan and I am preparing for the Ilets exam and I wrote an essay please, can you review my writing and send me feedback. .
These days, the number of people who want to explore places in harsh conditions has increased a lot so, I believe that there are pros and cons to this certain topic. This essay will discuss my personal knowledge and conclusion.
In one hand, exploring such places has some benefits to visitors especially those who has the interest to explore places. For example, freezing ( under 0 degree, boiling weather)
It provides them the knowledge and special experiences that they had not try it before. Such as, skating, climbing mountains, diving…. etc. So, that is why some take it as hobby and enjoyable activitiy.
On the other hand, despite the benefits to visit these places, there are a lot of threats to human. To illustrate, these places such as Sahara Desert or the Antarctic had a serious impact on visitors who having breathing difficulties or other illnesses that can not continue his trip because of it. In addition, some of these places can harm people who does not be careful doing danger activity or they lose their equipment during the trip. For instance, jumping, hang gliding, and scuba diving. This proves clearly that if you are not careful, you may be suffer from severe problems.
In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both sides positive and negative. I believe that although despite the bad one it is very fantastic experience that I will plan to do, and I already have some places in my mind. Due to the increase of the demand to visit places they have not seen before.
I would like you to evaluate me? What score can I get from 9?
Thank you a lot. .
Hello. .
How are you doing?
My name is Afnan and I am preparing for the Ilets exam and I wrote an essay
please
, can you review my writing and
send
me feedback. .
These days, the number of
people
who
want to explore
places
in harsh conditions has increased a lot
so
, I believe that there are pros and cons to this certain topic. This essay will discuss my personal knowledge and conclusion.
In one hand, exploring such
places
has
some
benefits to visitors
especially
those
who
has the interest to explore
places
.
For example
, freezing ( under 0 degree, boiling weather)
It provides them the knowledge and special experiences that they had not try it
before
. Such as, skating, climbing mountains, diving…. etc.
So
,
that is
why
some
take it as hobby and enjoyable activitiy.
On the other hand
, despite the benefits to visit these
places
, there are
a lot of
threats to human. To illustrate, these
places
such as Sahara Desert or the Antarctic had a serious impact on visitors
who
having breathing difficulties or other illnesses that can not continue his trip
because
of it.
In addition
,
some
of these
places
can harm
people
who
does not be careful doing
danger
activity or they lose their equipment during the trip.
For instance
, jumping, hang gliding, and scuba diving. This proves
clearly
that if you are not careful, you may be suffer from severe problems.
In conclusion
, after a careful analysis of both sides
positive
and
negative
. I believe that although despite the
bad
one it is
very
fantastic experience that I will plan to do, and I already have
some
places
in my mind. Due to the increase of the demand to visit
places
they have not
seen
before
.
I would like you to evaluate me? What score can I
get
from 9?
Thank you a lot. .
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