The idea is relevant, but they have failed to explain why cars cause traffic jams or give examples
The idea is relevant, but they have failed to explain why cars cause traffic jams or give examples RY7GG
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Band 7- Gives relevant ideas, and these are developed with explanations or examples, but these ideas may be too general or lack focus.
Example- The main problem causing traffic jams is too many cars. In many cities around the world, there are lots of cars, and this causes traffic jams. For example, the number of cars purchased in developing countries is increasing yearly.
This student has presented a clear position, but they have given a very general explanation, and their example lacks focus and is not specifically linked to the main point.
Band 8 – Gives relevant ideas and these are developed with focused and specific ideas and examples.
Example- The main problem causing traffic jams is too many cars. When we have more vehicles than a city’s infrastructure was designed for, it leads to congestion. For example, Ho Chi Minh City was designed to cope with around 500, 000 cars, and the city now has over 2 million cars, resulting in chronic traffic problems.
This student has explained their point very well, explaining exactly why they think too many cars are the problem and giving a very specific and relevant example to prove their point. If you can’t think of a specific example, make one up. The examiners are not interested in how factual your examples are, just your ability to make one.
Cohesive devices are also sometimes called ‘linking devices’ or ‘linking words’. Below are some examples:
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Band 7- Gives relevant
ideas
, and these
are developed
with explanations or
examples
,
but
these
ideas
may be too general or lack focus.
Example- The main problem causing
traffic
jams is too
many
cars
. In
many
cities
around the world, there are lots of
cars
, and this causes
traffic
jams. For
example
, the number of
cars
purchased
in
developing countries
is increasing yearly.
This student has presented a
clear
position,
but
they have
given
a
very
general explanation, and their
example
lacks focus and is not
specifically
linked to the main point.
Band 8
–
Gives relevant
ideas
and these
are developed
with focused and specific
ideas
and examples.
Example- The main problem causing
traffic
jams is too
many
cars
. When we have more vehicles than a city’s infrastructure
was designed
for, it leads to congestion. For
example
, Ho Chi Minh City
was designed
to cope with around 500, 000
cars
, and the city
now
has over 2 million
cars
, resulting in chronic
traffic
problems.
This student has
explained
their point
very
well, explaining exactly why they
think
too
many
cars
are the problem and giving a
very
specific and relevant
example
to prove their point. If you can’t
think
of a specific
example
,
make
one up. The examiners are not interested in how factual your
examples
are,
just
your ability to
make
one.
Cohesive devices are
also
sometimes
called ‘linking devices’ or ‘linking words’. Below are
some
examples
:
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