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Is Drug Legalization the Best Option?

Is Drug Legalization the Best Option? 6P1Pj
Drugs are any medicines or substances that are introduced into the body and have physiological effects on it. These substances or remedies have been around for a long time, since the first days of human civilization. They were obtained from different plants, materials made by animals and some minerals. But back then they were used, not only as medicinal remedies, but also they would implement them in religious rituals, which made the holy leaders the managers of them most of the time. But they soon became an addiction since “drugs produce a surge of dopamine in a part of the brain called the basal ganglia” (M. Carmona, 2022). For example Ecuadorians started consuming cocaine and would mix it with other drugs so it would be easier for the substance to get into the bloodstream. And this addiction sadly has continued to happen until today, which made drug dealers (cartels) start to arise. So with this essay I will prove how the legalization of drugs will be a major influence on drug dealers. A cartel is a criminal agreement between groups that supply drugs illegally, and these cartels are what drug dealers are so proud to be a part of. These groups or organizations have existed for over 50 years now, and one of the first major ones to ever exist was the Medellín cartel, led by Pablo Escobar, which originated in Colombia in 1970, when colombians started to sneak in small amounts of cocaine into the United states. Soon after the claim of cocaine became so big, that it caused the expansion of the trade, making the cartel buy airplanes and islands to hide their merchandise. Then the fight between the Medellín gang and another drug cartel called Cali, also from Colombia, made Pablo Escobar's cartel to break, and as a consequence Escobar became one of the most wanted people worldwide. His disappearance made the Cali cartel take over the power in Colombia. This cartel was more indirect and refined compared to the Medellin; they even got to a point where they took away Medellin´s popularity and made everybody see how violent of a cartel it was, and helped the police force capture Escobar. But shortly after countless members of the Cali cartel began to be arrested and by 1990 it was almost completely dissolved. And finally in 1993 Pablo Escobar was killed by a police officer in Colombia. Then also around the 1970´s Mexico was trafficking a lot of marijuana, but thanks to the U. S. power in Colombia for detaining the movement of drugs from South Africa, they rose with the sales of cocaine. One of the first Mexican cartels was the Tijuana cartel, put together in 1980 by the Arellano Félix family, which became really well-known for exporting marijuana, cocaine and methamphetamine into the United States. The birth of Mexico's largest cartel can be traced back to Miguel Ángel Félix Gallardo, nicknamed "The Godfather", who served as a liaison to the notorious Medellin cartel. Gallardo went underground after cartel co-founder Rafael Caro Quintero was convicted of murdering U. S. Army agent Enrique Camarena in 1985. The Drug Enforcement Administration, and then the drug lords, later held a summit among Mexico's major drug dealers. The conference divided Mexico into "plazas" or regions controlled by various drug lords. The agreement strengthened key players in the trade, including the Sinaloa Federation and the Arellano Felix brothers of Tijuana. Since then, drug lords have disappeared one after another, new groups have risen as loyalties reduced, political protections shift, and assassinations and arrests have occurred. Cartels have always been a huge problem to the economy of Mexico, because they offer consumers higher than competitive prices. They can also support inefficient companies within an industry and prevent the adoption of cost-cutting techniques that lead to lower prices. Also they discourage new entrants and act as barriers to entry. Lack of competition with fixed prices leads to lack of innovation. Companies seek to improve their production or products to gain a competitive advantage. With cartels, these companies have no incentive to do so. And if it was not enough, the consumption and sale of drugs have also been a very big issue to people´s health, especially to teenagers, over four in ten adolescents know someone who has been addicted to drugs. Drug abuse or addiction is a disease that affects a person's brain and behavior and results in uncontrolled use of drugs and medicines, both legal and illegal. Itbegins with the experimental use of recreational drugs in social settings, and drug use becomes more frequent in some people. For others, especially opioids, drug addiction sets in when they take prescription drugs or receive them from someone who holds a prescription. And all of these drug problems create a huge impact among the society, both economic and social. So to conclude, the legalization of drugs can be a good option only for the economy, due to the fact that the cost of consuming it and obtaining it will be a lot less than it is right now, it will decrease because there will be more places to buy it as well as it will be cheaper, as a result of the market competition. But on the other hand, health wise legalizing it could be a big mistake, because there would not be a way to be able to control the production or sales of the drugs, you could obtain it anywhere, making it easier to increase the percentages of drug abuse and addiction. And for the cartels and the social part it would also be a bad option, since they will not have a market anymore, and the organized crime would rise a lot, as well as the insecurity in Mexico, jeopardizing innocent people's lives and their cities. Therefore in order to keep everyone safe, in my opinion, the best option, regarding the legalization of drugs, is to not legalize them at all, and continue with the system we know nowadays.
Drugs
are any medicines or substances that
are introduced
into the body and have physiological effects on it. These substances or remedies have been around for a long time, since the
first
days of human civilization. They
were obtained
from
different
plants, materials made by animals and
some
minerals.
But
back then they were
used
, not
only
as medicinal remedies,
but
also
they would implement them in religious rituals, which made the holy leaders the managers of them most of the time.
But
they
soon
became
an addiction since
“drugs
produce a surge of dopamine in a part of the brain called the basal ganglia” (M.
Carmona
, 2022).
For example
Ecuadorians
started
consuming
cocaine
and would mix it with other
drugs
so
it would be easier for the substance to
get
into the bloodstream. And this addiction
sadly
has continued to happen until
today
, which made
drug
dealers
(cartels)
start
to arise.
So
with this essay I will prove how the legalization of
drugs
will be a major influence on
drug
dealers. A
cartel
is a criminal agreement between groups that supply
drugs
illegally
, and these
cartels
are what
drug
dealers are
so
proud to be a part of. These groups or organizations have existed for over 50 years
now
, and one of the
first
major ones to ever exist was the Medellín
cartel
, led by Pablo Escobar, which originated in Colombia in 1970, when
colombians
started
to sneak in
small
amounts of
cocaine
into the
United states
.
Soon
after the claim of
cocaine
became
so
big
, that it caused the expansion of the trade, making the
cartel
buy
airplanes and islands to
hide
their merchandise. Then the fight between the Medellín gang and another
drug
cartel
called Cali,
also
from Colombia, made Pablo Escobar's
cartel
to break, and as a consequence Escobar
became
one of the most wanted
people
worldwide. His disappearance made the Cali
cartel
take over the power in Colombia. This
cartel
was more indirect and refined compared to the Medellin; they even
got
to a point where they took away
Medellin´s
popularity and made everybody
see
how violent of a
cartel
it was, and
helped
the police force capture Escobar.
But
shortly after countless members of the Cali
cartel
began to
be arrested
and by 1990 it was almost completely dissolved. And
finally
in 1993 Pablo Escobar
was killed
by a police officer in Colombia. Then
also
around the
1970´s
Mexico was trafficking
a lot of
marijuana,
but
thanks to the U. S. power in Colombia for detaining the movement of
drugs
from South Africa, they rose with the sales of cocaine. One of the
first
Mexican
cartels
was the Tijuana
cartel
, put together in 1980 by the Arellano
Félix
family, which
became
really
well-known for exporting marijuana,
cocaine
and methamphetamine into the United States. The birth of Mexico's largest
cartel
can
be traced
back to Miguel Ángel
Félix
Gallardo
, nicknamed
"
The Godfather
"
, who served as a liaison to the notorious Medellin cartel.
Gallardo
went underground after
cartel
co-founder Rafael
Caro
Quintero
was convicted
of murdering U. S. Army agent Enrique
Camarena
in 1985. The
Drug
Enforcement Administration, and then the
drug
lords, later held a summit among Mexico's major
drug
dealers. The conference divided Mexico into
"
plazas
"
or regions controlled by various
drug
lords.
The
agreement strengthened key players in the trade, including the
Sinaloa
Federation and the Arellano Felix brothers of Tijuana. Since then,
drug
lords have disappeared one after another, new groups have risen as loyalties
reduced
, political protections shift, and assassinations and arrests have occurred. Cartels have always been a huge problem to the economy of Mexico,
because
they offer consumers higher than competitive prices. They can
also
support inefficient
companies
within an industry and
prevent
the adoption of cost-cutting techniques that lead to lower prices.
Also
they discourage new entrants and act as barriers to entry. Lack of competition with
fixed
prices leads to lack of innovation.
Companies
seek to
improve
their production or products to gain a competitive advantage. With
cartels
, these
companies
have no incentive to do
so
. And if it was not
enough
, the consumption and sale of
drugs
have
also
been a
very
big
issue to
people´s
health,
especially
to
teenagers
, over four in ten adolescents know someone who has
been addicted
to drugs. Drug abuse or addiction is a disease that affects a person's brain and behavior and results in uncontrolled
use
of
drugs
and medicines, both legal and illegal.
Itbegins
with the experimental
use
of recreational
drugs
in social settings, and
drug
use
becomes more frequent in
some
people
. For others,
especially
opioids,
drug
addiction sets in when they take prescription
drugs
or receive them from someone who holds a prescription. And all of these
drug
problems create a huge impact among the society, both economic and social.
So
to conclude
, the legalization of
drugs
can be a
good
option
only
for the economy, due to the fact that the cost of consuming it and obtaining it will be a lot less than it is right
now
, it will decrease
because
there will be more places to
buy
it
as well
as it will be cheaper,
as a result
of the market competition.
But
on the other hand
, health wise legalizing it could be a
big
mistake,
because
there would not be a way to be able to control the production or sales of the
drugs
, you could obtain it anywhere, making it easier to increase the percentages of
drug
abuse and addiction. And for the
cartels
and the social part it would
also
be a
bad
option, since they will not have a market anymore, and the organized crime would rise a lot,
as well
as the insecurity in Mexico, jeopardizing innocent
people
's
lives
and their cities.
Therefore
in order to
keep
everyone safe, in my opinion, the best option, regarding the legalization of
drugs
, is to not legalize them at all, and continue with the system we know nowadays.
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