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Where did World Vision go wrong in its report about Syrian widows?

Where did World Vision go wrong in its report about Syrian widows? PbRNj
On April 11, World Vision published its report titled “Women and Children of Syria’s Widow Camps: Hardest to Reach, Most at Risk”, which was the first known assessment of its kind by an INGO and was carried out with the support of local NGOs as the report said. This report has created a social uproar and unease among Syrians, activists, and Syrian NGOs workers, who considered that the report was discredited with a lot of mistakes, misunderstandings, and generalizations. Questions about the report methodology: The report was written by two British researchers, one identifying herself as an independent researcher and the other as part of the World Vision team, with the contribution of six other people-- one of them is a Jordan researcher-- and members of the World Vision Syria Response Advocacy Response Group and MEAL team. None of the team above was Syrian or visited the Widows' camps in northern Syria, and the local organizations that collected the data were absent when the results were analyzed and interpreted, and the draft report was not shared with these NGOs as agreed. Regarding the sample surveyed, the report said that the report methodology has primarily consisted of qualitative interviews conducted with 200 women, 139 adolescents (11-18 years old), and 80 children (6-10 years old), living in 28 “pure” and mixed widow camps in Idleb and Aleppo as well as. While the report indicates that 20% of the sample was from children 6-11 years old, an important question arises about how these interviews were conducted with children of that age, which the report never made clear. Whether the data collectors competent and knowledgeable? Were they pre-trained? Did the interviews take place with parental or a guardian's consent? Did the child understand the questions well? Especially since the question is asking about a sensitive, such as neglect, harassment, and mental health. The report was also based on interviews with six Key Informant Interviews (KIIs) with humanitarian coordination actors (Sector Cluster leads) and local organizations who have had access to some of the camps since 2021. There is no information about those Key Informant Interviews such as their roles or gender and powers were not known. It is necessary more information about KIIs since many organization's directors are working from outside Syria, and females are usually working with widows, while males are not allowed to deal with this segment. Erroneous or biased information: The report indicated that widows' camps are supported by Islamic and Gulf charities, and it claims that permits are not provided to foreign organizations operating by the "Salvation Government", the administrative arm of "HTS", or by the AFAD Foundation, Only a limited number of local organizations were allowed to offer protection or psychological support projects. This sentence seems biased, especially with international organizations evading support for many important projects such as education and health care projects under various pretexts. Despite the exacerbation of the needs, the humanitarian response process is still regressing, even in the areas of basic needs such as food. On the other hand, many courses and projects are held in these camps to raise the efficiency of this segment, enhance its ability to be self-reliant, and start small projects. Many service providers and female trainers who work with widows confirm that the local authority has not been prevented from holding such courses in these camps, which makes the report's information inaccurate. Elsewhere, the report mentions the following sentence: “Due to the absence of specialized care - medical psychological care - approximately one-third of women resort to prayer as a positive way of dealing with fears. ” The inclusion of this sentence in this formulation indicates that the researchers are very far from the studied society and its cultural, intellectual, and religious values that consider prayer as a cornerstone maintained by a wide segment of society, helping them to always charge their spiritual energies. They resort to it additionally in crises to seek help and support from God, and not because they lack competent care. Cultural and Community Sensitivities: In my opinion, the paragraph that received the most attention from the Arab and International media - which ignored the rest important aspects of the need - was the one that talked about sexual violence was within these camps, which caused a deep societal rejection of the report and the party that issued it. The research did not have any idea about the sensitivity of presenting such topics in Arab societies, and how it is necessary to be accurate in presenting such information in order not to create new societal problems. The report indicated that "Around 25% of women stated that they had witnessed sexual abuse in the camp daily, weekly or monthly ". This sentence has been distorted by some websites claiming that a quarter of the women in the camp have been subjected to sexual abuse, ignoring the next sentence, which indicated that only 9% of women and girls reported experiencing sexual abuse themselves - with the actual number likely to be significantly higher. According to what has been mentioned in the report, speaking about "witnessing sexual abuse in the camp daily, weekly or monthly" seems very confused and incomprehensible. because seeing these accidents is not possible in this open society. It may be mean hearing about it. It was also not clear if the answers were from the same camp or from other camps, as many of the answers may refer to a specific incident that took place in their camp and the women's answers mention it, or they are speaking about the Sexual harassment which can be noticed daily or weekly or monthly. This hypothesis is reinforced by the quotation from one of the interviewees in the same report, which indicates that they receive between 2-3 GBV cases of rape annually and that these cases are documented and confirmed by many GBV females workers in the camps who emphasize that forced sexual abuse cannot be hidden. Many media agencies followed the Guardian report which used " survival sex " that was mentioned in one of the quotes as a respondent opinion and transformed it into a subheadline. This in turn reflects a state of unprofessionalism, generalization, and misunderstanding of the situation in the studied society. While the studied society has a cultural perception of the women's reputation, this report and media agencies --especially the Guardian which titled its report with a partial sentence-- have contributed a wrong and negative stereotyping of a sensitive segment. In addition to that, they exposed them to a societal stigma that could affect their security or deprive them of the services they have received. Furthermore, this stigma will enhance their weakness and problems and make them vulnerable to additional exploitation on the pretext of their weak resistance and needs.
On April 11, World Vision published its
report
titled
“Women
and
Children
of Syria’s Widow Camps: Hardest to Reach, Most at
Risk
”, which was the
first
known assessment of its kind by an INGO and
was carried
out with the
support
of
local
NGOs as the
report
said. This
report
has created a social uproar and unease among Syrians, activists, and Syrian NGOs workers,
who
considered that the
report
was discredited
with
a lot of
mistakes, misunderstandings, and generalizations. Questions about the
report
methodology: The
report
was written
by two British
researchers
, one identifying herself as an independent
researcher
and the
other
as part of the World Vision team, with the contribution of six
other
people
-- one of them is a Jordan
researcher--
and members of the World Vision Syria Response Advocacy Response Group and MEAL team. None of the team above was Syrian or visited the Widows' camps in northern Syria, and the
local
organizations
that collected the data were absent when the results
were analyzed
and interpreted, and the draft
report
was not shared with these NGOs as
agreed
. Regarding the sample surveyed, the
report
said that the
report
methodology has
primarily
consisted of qualitative
interviews
conducted with 200
women
, 139 adolescents (11-18 years
old
), and 80
children
(6-10 years
old
), living in 28 “pure” and mixed widow camps in
Idleb
and Aleppo
as well
as. While the
report
indicates that 20% of the sample was from
children
6-11 years
old
, an
important
question arises about how these
interviews
were conducted
with
children
of that age, which the
report
never made
clear
. Whether the data collectors competent and knowledgeable? Were they pre-trained? Did the
interviews
take place with parental or a guardian's consent? Did the child understand the questions well?
Especially
since the question is asking about a sensitive, such as neglect, harassment, and mental health. The
report
was
also
based on
interviews
with six Key Informant
Interviews
(
KIIs
) with humanitarian coordination actors (Sector Cluster leads) and
local
organizations
who
have had access to
some of the
camps since 2021. There is no
information
about those Key Informant
Interviews
such as their roles or gender and powers were not known. It is necessary more
information
about
KIIs
since
many
organization's directors are working from outside Syria, and females are
usually
working with widows, while males are not
allowed
to deal with this segment. Erroneous or biased information: The
report
indicated that widows' camps
are supported
by Islamic and Gulf charities, and it claims that permits are not provided to foreign
organizations
operating by the
"
Salvation
Government
"
, the administrative arm of
"
HTS
"
, or by the
AFAD
Foundation,
Only
a limited number of
local
organizations
were
allowed
to offer protection or psychological
support
projects. This
sentence
seems biased,
especially
with international
organizations
evading
support
for
many
important
projects
such as education and health care
projects
under various pretexts. Despite the exacerbation of the
needs
, the humanitarian response process is
still
regressing, even in the areas of basic
needs
such as food. On the
other
hand,
many
courses and
projects
are held
in these camps to raise the efficiency of this segment, enhance its ability to be self-reliant, and
start
small
projects
.
Many
service providers and female trainers
who
work with widows confirm that the
local
authority has not been
prevented
from holding such courses in these camps, which
makes
the report's
information
inaccurate. Elsewhere, the
report
mentions the following
sentence
: “Due to the absence of specialized care
-
medical psychological care
-
approximately one-third of
women
resort to prayer as a
positive
way of dealing with fears. ” The inclusion of this
sentence
in this formulation indicates that the
researchers
are
very
far from the studied
society
and its cultural, intellectual, and religious values that consider prayer as a cornerstone maintained by a wide segment of
society
, helping them to always charge their spiritual energies. They resort to it
additionally
in crises to seek
help
and
support
from God, and not
because
they lack competent care. Cultural and Community Sensitivities: In my opinion, the paragraph that received the most attention from the Arab and International media
-
which
ignored
the rest
important
aspects of the
need
-
was the one that talked about
sexual
violence was within these camps, which caused a deep societal rejection of the
report
and the party that issued it. The research did not have any
idea
about the sensitivity of presenting such topics in Arab
societies
, and how it is necessary to be accurate in presenting such
information
in order not to create new societal problems. The
report
indicated that
"
Around 25% of
women
stated that they had witnessed
sexual
abuse
in the camp daily, weekly or monthly
"
. This
sentence
has
been distorted
by
some
websites claiming that a quarter of the
women
in the camp have
been subjected
to
sexual
abuse
, ignoring the
next
sentence
, which indicated that
only
9% of
women
and girls reported experiencing
sexual
abuse
themselves
-
with the actual number likely to be
significantly
higher. According to what has
been mentioned
in the
report
, speaking about
"
witnessing
sexual
abuse
in the camp daily, weekly or monthly
"
seems
very
confused and incomprehensible.
because
seeing these accidents is not possible in this open
society
. It may be mean hearing about it. It was
also
not
clear
if the answers were from the same camp or from
other
camps, as
many
of the answers may refer to a specific incident that took place in their camp and the women's answers mention it, or they are speaking about the
Sexual
harassment which can
be noticed
daily or weekly or monthly. This hypothesis
is reinforced
by the quotation from one of the interviewees in the same
report
, which indicates that they receive between 2-3
GBV
cases of rape
annually
and that these cases
are documented
and confirmed by
many
GBV
females workers in the camps
who
emphasize that forced
sexual
abuse
cannot
be hidden
.
Many
media agencies followed the Guardian
report
which
used
"
survival sex
"
that
was mentioned
in one of the quotes as a respondent opinion and transformed it into a
subheadline
. This in turn reflects a state of
unprofessionalism
, generalization, and misunderstanding of the situation in the studied society. While the studied
society
has a cultural perception of the women's reputation, this
report
and media agencies --
especially
the Guardian which titled its
report
with a partial
sentence--
have contributed a
wrong
and
negative
stereotyping of a sensitive segment.
In addition
to that, they exposed them to a societal stigma that could affect their security or deprive them of the services they have received.
Furthermore
, this stigma will enhance their weakness and problems and
make
them vulnerable to additional exploitation on the pretext of their weak resistance and
needs
.
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