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Together we beat cancer honets

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One day in the evening I decided to go to the mall to buy some groceries when I was getting ready my small sister saw me she asked me politely “ where are you going, Noora? “ I smiled I told her “ I am going to the mall, want to join? ” she jumped happily We arrived to the mall, I told her that I will buy some groceries and then we will play, I finished buying my groceries and we went to play, by chance I saw my patient narjes, I saw how people were terrified by her even the security he told her parent to leave I was in shock, she told her mother “let’s go back home”, Narjes felt sad. My sister went to play but all my thoughts was occupied by Narjes. Finally we went back home, I was thinking about Narjes how she believes that she would die one day and she won’t live her life like the other kids. I was always thinking of how to convince her to do the surgery especially that I would take that surgery, she was the only patient who hates me, but narjes was mysterious. I woked up as always, I went to the hospital as soon as I entered the hospital was in mess, I wondered what happened all the doctors was gathered infront of Narjes room she was breaking everything in the room, she was holding a glass in her neck, she threated the doctors if they tried to come closer she would kill her self, the doctors was panicking, I told everyone to leave the room immediately, Narjes was surprised she asked me “don’t you believe that I could kill myself” I laughed “ I told her you can’t do that Narjes, you want to enjoy every moment in your life like the other kids” she got angry and put the glass near to her neck the blood was covering her tiny hand she replied “ see I can kill my self “ I got near to her I hold her hand and taught her the right way to kill herself, I felt that she won’t do it. She stared at me and I told her” here you go, DO IT! KILL YOURSELF “. The glass fell from her hand and she started crying “why can't I live like other children why do I have to pass this test” I got near to her and hugged her I whispered “ it’s okay” I gave her a sedative. In the next day, I went to visit her, she apologized to me, I was happy that it would be a chance that I can convince her, I started asking her about the surgery, she told me hesitantly “I am afraid to do it, but I am satisfied of the existence of this disease in my brain, but I am afraid that I won’t wake up again”. We have to do the surgery early before it get worse, I went back home suddenly my phone started ringing it was my patient Mona, I started speaking with her and told her about Narjes’s situation she told me “ I got an idea! ! tomorrow I will come to the hospital and I will try to convince her" I jumped from my place “ REALLY! you would do that for me, Mona? ” she relpied “ yes everything for my hero”. I went to the hospital, Mona was setting near the coffee, I ran and hugged her “ long time no see” I led her to the room and I introduced Mona to Narjes, Mona started convincing Narjes, Mona told her about her story with cancer, Narjes was amazed by Mona and finally Narjes decided to do the surgery tomorrow. We took the necessary steps to start the surgery. Finally here comes the big day, we started the surgery, thank god the surgery succeeded, after 3 months, we went to amusement park and we enjoyed and had fun.
One day in the evening I decided to go to the mall to
buy
some
groceries when I was getting ready my
small
sister
saw
me she asked me
politely
where are you going,
Noora
? “ I smiled I
told
her
I am going to the mall, want to
join
? ” she jumped
happily
We arrived to the mall, I
told
her that I will
buy
some
groceries and
then we will play, I finished buying my
groceries and
we
went
to play, by chance I
saw
my patient
narjes
, I
saw
how
people
were terrified
by her even the security he
told
her parent to
leave
I was in shock, she
told
her mother “
let
’s go back home”,
Narjes
felt sad. My sister
went
to play
but
all my thoughts
was occupied
by
Narjes
.
Finally
we
went
back home, I was thinking about
Narjes
how she believes that she would
die
one
day and
she won’t
live
her life like the other kids. I was always thinking of how to convince her to do the surgery
especially
that I would take that surgery, she was the
only
patient who hates me,
but
narjes
was mysterious. I
woked
up as always, I
went
to the
hospital
as
soon
as I entered the
hospital
was in mess, I wondered what happened all the doctors
was gathered
infront
of
Narjes
room
she was breaking everything in the
room
, she was holding a glass in her neck, she
threated
the doctors if they tried to
come
closer she would
kill
her self, the doctors was panicking, I
told
everyone to
leave
the
room
immediately,
Narjes
was surprised
she asked me “don’t you believe that I could
kill
myself” I laughed
I
told
her you can’t do that
Narjes
, you want to enjoy every moment in your life like the other kids” she
got
angry and put the glass
near
to her neck the blood was covering her tiny hand she replied
see
I can
kill
my self
I
got
near
to her I hold her hand and taught her the right way to
kill
herself, I felt that she won’t do it. She stared at me and I
told
her” here you go, DO IT!
KILL
YOURSELF “. The glass fell from her
hand and
she
started
crying “why can't I
live
like other children why do I
have to
pass this
test
” I
got
near
to her and hugged her I whispered
it’s okay” I gave her a sedative. In the
next
day, I
went
to visit her, she apologized to me, I was happy that it would be a chance that I can convince her, I
started
asking her about the surgery, she
told
me
hesitantly
“I am afraid to do it,
but
I
am satisfied
of the existence of this disease in my brain,
but
I am afraid that I won’t wake up again”. We
have to
do the surgery early
before
it
get
worse, I
went
back home
suddenly
my phone
started
ringing it was my patient Mona, I
started
speaking with her and
told
her about
Narjes
’s situation she
told
me
I
got
an
idea
! !
tomorrow
I will
come
to the
hospital
and I will try to convince her
"
I jumped from my place
REALLY
!
you
would do that for me, Mona? ” she
relpied
yes everything for my hero”. I
went
to the
hospital
, Mona was setting
near
the coffee, I ran and hugged her
long time no
see
” I led her to the
room
and I introduced Mona to
Narjes
, Mona
started
convincing
Narjes
, Mona
told
her about her story with cancer,
Narjes
was amazed
by Mona and
finally
Narjes
decided to do the surgery tomorrow. We took the necessary steps to
start
the surgery.
Finally
here
comes
the
big
day, we
started
the surgery, thank god the surgery succeeded, after 3 months, we
went
to amusement
park and
we enjoyed and had fun.
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