Some people think that money is important factor to improve work proficiency, while others feel that working environment plays a major role. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Few individuals believe that improving work proficiency links with money; however, the remaining ones assume that the environment has a great role to play at working place instead of money. In my opinion, although the involvement of money at the workplace is associated with certain benefits, providing a better working ambiance seems to be more advantageous in this case due to some reasons.
To initiate the advantages of money in terms of making work more efficient. The first and foremost pro is the motivation among employees that probably make them more proficient. To elaborate, while getting a high salary, the employees are likely to pay more attention towards work rather than spending time on unnecessary things, like using mobile phones and gossiping with one another, while it might be impossible through getting proper working environment. Resultantly, the growth of the corporation increases a lot because of having the proper attention of workers on work. As an illustration, a person who is working in an IT company, whether it is local or international is likely to be more dedicated to work due to having high annual salary packages.
Despite the benefits of money, the working environment has pros too. The primary one is the mental satisfaction that might not be possible while getting a handsome salary. To explain, if the company provides a comfortable ambiance to workers instead of focusing only on giving money, like the behavior of seniors with juniors, including cooperation among employees to solve minor and major issues regarding work, the workers feel stress-free and more emphasis on work for a long time than those which is given on a daily basis. Not only this but also the employees do not have to face dire consequences on physical health, especially anxiety.
In conclusion, according to my perspective, though the stimulation among workers can be the major benefit of money for the improvement of work proficiency, the working environment seems to have more advantages because of psychological satisfaction.
Few individuals believe that improving work proficiency links with money;
however
, the remaining ones assume that the
environment
has a great role to play at working place
instead
of money. In my opinion, although the involvement of money at the workplace
is associated
with certain benefits, providing a better working ambiance seems to be more advantageous
in this case
due to
some
reasons.

To initiate the advantages of money in terms of making work more efficient. The
first
and foremost pro is the motivation among employees that
probably
make
them more proficient. To elaborate, while getting a high salary, the employees are likely to pay more attention towards work
rather
than spending time on unnecessary things, like using mobile phones and gossiping with one another, while it might be impossible through getting proper working
environment
.
Resultantly
, the growth of the corporation increases a lot
because
of having the proper attention of workers on work. As an illustration, a person who is working in an IT
company
, whether it is local or international is likely to be more dedicated to work due to having high annual salary packages.

Despite the benefits of money, the working
environment
has pros too. The primary one is the mental satisfaction that might not be possible while getting a handsome salary. To
explain
, if the
company
provides a comfortable ambiance to workers
instead
of focusing
only
on giving money, like the behavior of seniors with juniors, including cooperation among employees to solve minor and major issues regarding work, the workers feel
stress
-free and more emphasis on work for a long time than those which is
given
on a daily basis. Not
only
this
but
also
the employees do not
have to
face dire consequences on physical health,
especially
anxiety.

In conclusion
, according to my perspective, though the stimulation among workers can be the major benefit of money for the improvement of work proficiency, the working
environment
seems to have more advantages
because
of psychological satisfaction.

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